the ad looks great guys!!! just a few things... since you have to correct the typo, perhaps these can be considered as well:
can you tighten the leading between thank and you? it seems a bit spaced out; the THANK is awfully close to the top of the page, and doesn't seem connected to YOU
the BEST PICTURE line might look better moved up just a bit (decrease leading), so it's connected to the line above, or at least centered in the space. right now, it seems more connected to the listing below than the line above.
the kerning of the non-condensed san serif type and even the copperplate headlines could be tightened up a bit. also, a slight decrease in font size might be nice for the "donated by" lines, and the use of ampersands in lieu of the other "ands" since you already used it up above in the thank you listing. doing that would also shorten that top line a bit and create a more visually pleasing "triangle" of text. i think using "&" and "and" in the same sentence is a bit strange, even if it's because of space limitations. a simple "keep it consistent" type of thing....
also, space is tight on the left and right of the columns.. it seems there is a bit of space to move column 3 over to the left a bit so the period after "assn." isn't almost touching the edge of the page. (maybe if the counterspace between all the columns were the same, it might help.)
however, assuming this is a bleed ad, maybe it won't look that way when printed. also, the bullets look great centered and in color, but still a bit large IMO, and it seems the bullet in the last line isn't necessary, it really isn't a listing afterall. perhaps "...an unprecedented consensus" in italics would suffice.
also, i suggest using a different color than bright blue -- perhaps pulling out a medium green from the photo above, so the bullet color ties in with the photograph and isn't an arbitrary color introduced into the composition.
for the last line (url) i see no reason why it's condensed. perhaps non-condensed tightly kerned italic bold would look good too, with a slight increase in leading to pull it away from the three lines above. if it is a 100% bleed ad, it could very well sit on the edge of the image area.
i'd increase the size of the logo just a bit so it isn't the same width as the two lines above. however, if you tighten the kerning in those lines, that will automatically happen.
i don't know what format you're sending this to variety's ad dept., but maybe their excellent art director will be able to discern any notes and make changes.
lol, deadlines.... how i don't miss them! but as i recall, there was never enough time, never enough, but always enough for last minute changes.
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